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It’s a bad day - again.
No clothes are clean;  no working washer.
The bus was early;  I was not.
The water was cold;  as were the glares of the people.
Nothing works - everything fades.
Life is but a scale of grey to gray - an extremity of black and white.
I would rather be blinded by life;  than bored with it.
Seeing all the things I have missed;  knowing the time was wasted.
I’d much rather be in a sad,  blue period - than a bland,  dark rut.
©2005-2009 ~TheShun
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I felt like this about 3 years ago. I didn't know what to do about school and I ended up getting kicked out. Now, it's the same thing, except with my job. Who knows what will happen. The picture is from 3 years ago.

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:iconartbennyrgrau:
ooo
nice one man
starts off as "one of those days"
where everything is all...:chainsaw:
then a sort of acceptance
and then you move on
couldnt find the right words to say it tho
but great piece!
hope all goes better oi!

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It will, I hope. It's not terribly bad, yet...

Thane
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:iconartbennyrgrau:
wikid
if it all goes shot ta hell
atleast you have this outlet to thaw
experiences with
and in the end
you'll have something worth the time
then millions will kiss yer ass =D
well just hope ya aint long dead by then
lol
no one appreciates ya till yer dead....
and then they tear ya appart!
but your work will live on!
BEERS FOR EVERY ONE!

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Heh. Are you sober...?

Thane
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:iconartbennyrgrau:
just sleep deprived :faint:

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Even better!

Thane
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:iconradadam:
I like how it is split between a phsyical world and a metal world. You are put in the shoes of the cold world he (you) are in before diving into a more abstract view of the mental philosophy.

"as were the glares of the people." - I would prefer the use of 'so' as opposed to 'as'. I feel it makes it more of a stop phrase than flowing, which I feel fits better in this piece. Moreso a personal preference, but we'll see what you think.

"sad, blue period - than a bland, dark rut." - I don't particulrarly like the "dark rut". It works, but in light of being overly critical I will offer suggestions. :) "sad, blue period" is directly relating a emotion with a color, whereas "bland, dark rut" is using the rut to describe the feeling instead of color. Consider reworking with replacing "dark" with a color, or a word describing grey (ie ashen). Could very well work the best this way.

Overall a rockstar piece. 'tis my second fav now. lateaz :highfive:
:icontheshun:
"So" is an amount.
"As" is an equal.

"So" is a conjunction but I was using "As" as a tie in adverb. It's a gay grammar thing. I agree, "so" sounds better, but it's just not correct.

I originall had it as "bland, black rut" but it sounded really wierd. Now that I think about it, "bland, dark rut" goes with my "too intense" personality.

Woohoo for the second best.

Thane
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:iconfrostedwind:
Heeeeeey Thane! I like this piece muchly :+fav:ly even. I appreciate your talent for packing so much emotion and punch into a few short lines.... I <3 your work! I must admit, I had a few "good" long weeks this summer when the misfortune and mediocrity of it all got to me, so I identify very clearly with the theme. Very well articulated :hug:

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