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Affluence by ~TheShun:iconTheShun:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


My eyelids are heavy;  yet my soul is tireless;
Looking for answers to wealth.
My muse is absent;  but deeply she sleeps;
Praying for answers to wealth.
My ears are fed;  however my brain starves.
I do not see the answer,  no matter how close it is.
My fears are abundant;  my hope is secure;
Where does this answer play?  Repeat:
Play where this answer is?  Shuffle:
It’s just a little worrying.
Convoluted – and then it’s gone,
And I’m off,  as well,  sailing forth,  once again,  eluded,  illuded,  and alluded.
©2006-2008 ~TheShun
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Here it is: the best I have done so far.

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~ArtBennyRGrau:iconArtBennyRGrau: Nov 10, 2006, 5:54:03 PM
every time I read your stuff it's like,
when you are frustrated then you take a long drive
and you suddenly hear THAT song, you know.
A friggin song that plays ADVOCATE for how you are feeling at that moment (oddly enough it's a frustrated, restrained, melancholic, denied of one's true place feeling inside that seems to get a dash of bitterness in each word yet it's understood) and you can't help but go...
"yeah... Just like that...dammit"
Which is why some of my replies tend to stream along the vein of repetitiveness!
I realize I'm projecting tho I can't imagine anyone brilliant not feeling this way.

I do agree this is one of your best.
I get a little angry at those who never consider
good storytellers and poets as true artists.
...fuck
and oh yeah I love the word play and the
deliberate way you point out the word play in the resolution of the piece.
The last line is what I'm talking about
this time your "circular logic"style was less obvious in the sense that it becomes something else. It ties in with the first line of disdain yet the end is a cynical allusion to the old "i'm movin on keep positive" attitudes

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literature is art too: Genkidesu, Daijobuu... ne?...nya
~TheShun~JaqDHawkins
MARIA Totus tuum ego. clubs I im in ~utada-club~ifchinscouldkill
~TheShun:iconTheShun: Nov 12, 2006, 1:04:41 AM
Yeah. I love how I'm able to go back and reread my work and impress myself. It's great!

Thane
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~ArtBennyRGrau:iconArtBennyRGrau: Nov 12, 2006, 12:52:52 PM
lol

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literature is art too: Genkidesu, Daijobuu... ne?...nya
~TheShun~JaqDHawkins
MARIA Totus tuum ego. clubs I im in ~utada-club~ifchinscouldkill
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